The darkness swells up around me
I am dark, I am night.
These feelings, they overwhelm me
I am imbued, I am distilled...
...Dwelling in mystification...
...Breathing in contracted phrases...
...I fade away into non-existence...
Darkness...silence...the hum of a computer left on overnight.
Blinking in artificial light...although it is not far away.
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Tired...another shit poem...........
2 comments:
they're not shit! they clearly express a mood and paint some great visuals in my mind. I especially like the first 3 stanzas of this one, once you reached "the hum of a computer" I guess it took a bit of the mystery/mystical-ness away, but that's just personal taste. keep it up and good luck with your essays!
btw what kind of structures are there in poetry? I'm curious cuz I only remember vaguely: limericks, haikus lol *scratches head*....what were you using for yours?
I don't use any structure...lol that's why I'll never be a successful poet. =P
Thanks for reading it though. =)
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